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I was just nineteen years old
When I cut myself in two
The boy I wanted them to see
And the boy they never knew

Hid my hollow bones away
I've been hiding ever since
Yes, you may see the odd smile
But only ever a glimpse

But my heart was never broken
It was born in several pieces
And with every passing year
The size of the segments decreases

I was just nineteen years old
When I died for the first time
I did not cope so well
With leaving my childhood behind

I didn't want to face up
To these wretched bent back blues
But will I give in to the struggle?
No, with respect I refuse

See my grandfather gave me
The stubborn heart of an ox
I will die before I collapse
A coward I am not
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yasmeengtz Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2015
I wonder how a stranger came upon to look inside me....beautiful.
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CloudNumber8 Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2015   General Artist
what a beautiful comment :) thank you for saying those words about my poem
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SkyBluer Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Your writing is so beautiful <3
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CloudNumber8 Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2015   General Artist
thank you so much :) i appreciate it
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SkyBluer Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
very very welcome!
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Gladddragon Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2015  Student Digital Artist
12 yrs old.
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CloudNumber8 Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2015   General Artist
thank you for reading and commenting :)
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xF3ARL3SSx Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2015  Student Artist
I really felt that poem as I read it.
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CloudNumber8 Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2015   General Artist
thank you for the comment and the fave :)
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alyssaimi Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2015  Student Traditional Artist
wow..
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CloudNumber8 Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2015   General Artist
hey :) thanks for the comment and fave
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Simbalonso Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is brilliant! 
You have a lot of talent and thanks for sharing it :handshake: :clap:
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CloudNumber8 Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2014   General Artist
aww thank you for the comment and the fave :)
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Simbalonso Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome :pat:
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ennailaughter Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Your poetry is impossibly beautiful, you sir have an extreme amount of talent :)
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CloudNumber8 Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2014   General Artist
:) very kind of you to say so. I see you have watched me too, i appreciate that a lot :)
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ennailaughter Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
you are welcome :) and you definitely deserved it
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
A nice rhyme and over all very well written. I liked the message and how it described the "Die before defeat" concept however in a strange manner I guess ^^;
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CloudNumber8 Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014   General Artist
hey :) I am glad you enjoyed it. I like to add a little strangeness whenever possible lol

thanks for the comment :)
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You are very welcome :)
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jhadelapena Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
I can't..
just WOW!
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CloudNumber8 Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013   General Artist
thank you :)
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Poemgirl15 Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
asdfghj this is perfection!
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CloudNumber8 Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2013   General Artist
aww thank you! and thanks for the fave too :)
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Poemgirl15 Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
np :)
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shadowboxer23 Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2013
This is beautiful!
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CloudNumber8 Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013   General Artist
thank you! :)
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amyaime Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
the ending 
I cant even
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CloudNumber8 Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2013   General Artist
aww thank you for reading and commenting :)
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JunsuiShinzou Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Very beautiful.
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CloudNumber8 Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2013   General Artist
thank you :)
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leanlioncourt Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2013
Parfait, monsieur. Très belle. REALLY good. (:
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CloudNumber8 Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2013   General Artist
thank you so much :) merci :D
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Wolfgang627 Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2013  Student General Artist
beautiful.
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CloudNumber8 Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2013   General Artist
thank you :) and thanks for the fave too.
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xRayneBloodx Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is beautiful ;-; 
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CloudNumber8 Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2013   General Artist
thank you :)
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SaraWiseman Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Leaves me wondering what the other half isn't saying.
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CloudNumber8 Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2013   General Artist
yep :) thank you for taking time to read and comment.
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AdventureDude503 Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is absolutley beautiful. Written beautifully as well, by far on of my favourite poems I've found here on da. Really Sad :clap: :hug: 
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CloudNumber8 Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2013   General Artist
wow such a kind comment, thank you :) There is some amazing work on this site so i really do take that as a huge compliment
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AdventureDude503 Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're very welcome! Thanks for sharing, it was a pleasure to read! :)
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Sarahblerg Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013
them feels. <3 I adore this. Makes me feel less crazy :P beautifully written.
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CloudNumber8 Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2013   General Artist
:) that means a lot to me that you would say that. To make someone feel less alone or crazy is very special for me.

thank you!
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